Waves of salt
Crash beneath my feet
Silencing the tsunami in my mind.
I stand
transfixed
Oblivious to
time and space.
I am left reminiscing the days
Where it felt as if it were
Just the ocean
and me.
The fiery orange sun brightens my view as it rises
Like a Phoenix
And the aquamarine water glistens in the light
The crystal sea cleanses me
Swallowing the great waves of despair that once destroyed everything
I am whole once again.
Rationale:
The theme of my poem is redemption. To me, the ocean marks a fresh start.
Waves can be a metaphor for new beginnings. One wave can wash everything away,
but there is always a fresh wave immediately after that starts again. This is
like hope and despair. One wave of despair can be destructive, but there is
always a wave of hope that follows.
My poem is formed as a wave. I formed it by indenting certain lines. I
chose this form because it fits in perfectly with the topic and adds to the
overall aesthetic.
I used personification to describe the waves. “Swallowing the great waves
of despair that once destroyed me” (12). This shows the sea as a protective
monster. It will destroy negativity for the purpose of restoring peace.
I used imagery
to paint a picture of the scene that I was trying to describe. “And the aquamarine
water glistens in the light” (10). This use of imagery helps readers visualise
the scene the way I intended. Without imagery, the poem would be extremely
vague and hard to understand.
I used a simile to better describe the scene. “The fiery orange sun
brightens my view as it rises/like a Phoenix” (8-9). A Phoenix is a
mythological bird that rises from its ashes reborn. It is a metaphor for new
beginnings. I compared the rising sun to a Phoenix because the sun sets at
night, leaving the world dark, but then it rises again. This comparison is apt
for my topic of new beginnings.
I used enjambment in my poem. The sentences are randomly broken up and
sometimes bleed into the next line. I chose this format because like a wave,
it’s random and unpredictable.
I used diction to strengthen meanings. “I stand transfixed” (4) I could
have said “I stand still” but the word “transfixed” has a stronger and more
suitable meaning. This helps readers understand better with fewer words.
By Rhea
Ravi Kumar
06.03.2020
Eindhoven, Netherlands
P.S: Rhea is my eldest brother T.P.Ravikumar’s daughter and
is only 13 years old.
